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I point to the hair on my knuckle
and you say, “yes, this, too, I love.”

It is longer than the year before, curling
a little farther from my body. I say so

and you say, "I know."

I pull it out to two options: am I angry
that you saw my body betraying youth,

that first little slide, and did not tell me?
Or, do I pat your rounding belly and say,

“yes, this, too, I love.”
I feel like an evil genius, but likely, only :iconbeeinthebottle: will know why. I have conquered the impossible!

Slight edit based on feedback and acceptance by Your Daily Poem. Jayne's holding off on publishing it until February 16th - how much fun! :)

Great place to send your light verse. :heart:
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:iconhaphazardmelody:
haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
In the end, despite the slight bitter tone in the middle there, this is very sweet. :)
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vespera Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) thank you!
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014
I think you should've said "thank you for noticing" and doled out a warm hug, lol. ;)

To me, what makes this poem touching is how it tells a truth about a strong, loving relationship- how the little things about aging can bother us but makes no difference to our loved one, and how with a simple action and statement- Or, do I pat your rounding belly and say, “yes, this, too, I love.”- we can convey such a loving insult.

Congratulations on the publishing.

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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That wouldn't have been very poetic! ;)


(TY!)
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:iconeremitik:
Eremitik Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
No, it wouldnt have, would it? lol

And you are welcome.
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Swep-Lovitt Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014
vespera: balanced lines with an easy charm. a poem. swep
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vespera Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:rose: thank you Swep
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Swep-Lovitt Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
you're welcome
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inmyroom Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013
This made me smile LOADS. It's both wonderful and bitter. Well done =)
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) Thank you


how is your corner of the world?
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