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I point to the hair on my knuckle
and you say, “yes, this, too, I love.”

It is longer than the year before, curling
a little farther from my body. I say so

and you say, "I know."

I pull it out to two options: am I angry
that you saw my body betraying youth,

that first little slide, and did not tell me?
Or, do I pat your rounding belly and say,

“yes, this, too, I love.”
I feel like an evil genius, but likely, only :iconbeeinthebottle: will know why. I have conquered the impossible!

Slight edit based on feedback and acceptance by Your Daily Poem. Jayne's holding off on publishing it until February 16th - how much fun! :)

Great place to send your light verse. :heart:
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:iconhaphazardmelody:
haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
In the end, despite the slight bitter tone in the middle there, this is very sweet. :)
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) thank you!
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:iconeremitik:
Eremitik Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014
I think you should've said "thank you for noticing" and doled out a warm hug, lol. ;)

To me, what makes this poem touching is how it tells a truth about a strong, loving relationship- how the little things about aging can bother us but makes no difference to our loved one, and how with a simple action and statement- Or, do I pat your rounding belly and say, “yes, this, too, I love.”- we can convey such a loving insult.

Congratulations on the publishing.

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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That wouldn't have been very poetic! ;)


(TY!)
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:iconeremitik:
Eremitik Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
No, it wouldnt have, would it? lol

And you are welcome.
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:iconswep-lovitt:
Swep-Lovitt Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014
vespera: balanced lines with an easy charm. a poem. swep
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:rose: thank you Swep
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:iconswep-lovitt:
Swep-Lovitt Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
you're welcome
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:iconinmyroom:
inmyroom Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013
This made me smile LOADS. It's both wonderful and bitter. Well done =)
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) Thank you


how is your corner of the world?
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:iconenigmaticsmile:
enigmaticsmile Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's actually genius.  You should feel that way.  :)
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: :heart: :heart: thank you
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:iconbraxton-t-rutledge:
Braxton-T-Rutledge Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
How I know I'm not 20 anymore.

When I wake up in pain, I just get the fuck out of bed and go hurt some more instead of spending a few minutes wondering why I hurt.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
fuck. right? UGH
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:iconbraxton-t-rutledge:
Braxton-T-Rutledge Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013
When I was 20, if I woke up with a pain, I was like "OMG WTF BRO I HURT? BUT I SLEPT 3 HOURS THAT ALWAYS TAKES CARE OF IT." which was generally followed by "oh I slept on a beer bottle" or something like that.

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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle:
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:iconbraxton-t-rutledge:
Braxton-T-Rutledge Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013
yesterday I took a big step up into the back of a truck, felt something go pop in my left leg. 

when I was 20, taking a big step up into the back of a truck would have never made anything ever pop, crack, whinge, twitch, or ache.
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:iconsherbetblooms:
sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
hahaha cute :heart: no one is perfect...but loving someone certainly feels perfect :heart: It's so nice to see you happy.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: it is nice to be happy, thank you!
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:iconsherbetblooms:
sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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:iconchadwood:
chadwood Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013   Writer
This is really touching.  
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D Thank you!
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:iconliliwrites:
LiliWrites Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very sweet. <3
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: thank you!
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:icontuishimi:
Tuishimi Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
I love this, I really do.  Relationships grow with us and love, love doesn't simply tolerate, love embraces.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D Thank you!
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm awwwww-ing like the lot. :]
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:iconscatteredwords:
scatteredwords Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awwww.

You are evil. And a genius. And this is why I love you.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
;)
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:iconstormbringer23:
StormBringer23 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013
Be glad it has only betrayed you from your knuckle. Stealing inspiration from this, for me, would be...publicly degrading. And so I +fav, and move along quietly. :hug:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
this is adorable.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
dawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww ;)
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:icondrippingwords:
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Student Writer
Awwww.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:icondrippingwords:
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013  Student Writer
:heart:
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:iconbeeinthebottle:
beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013   Writer
I love it. :)  I don't think you're an evil genius....
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I dunno, I may be a little evil.
Although Jenner took me "calling out" his (small) beer belly online pretty well. He's got a pretty good sense of humor ;)
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:iconsvenspade09:
svenspade09 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
Love is just that love of everything about that person even the thought of defects or abrasions but thoughs that love you only see beauty.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:iconmagicaljoey:
MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013   Writer
knuckled= knuckles?
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
knuckle, just a typo writing it out from my notebook :)
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:icontuishimi:
Tuishimi Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
I was thinking "knuckle" but perhaps she has a secret reason for it.  :)
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:iconmagicaljoey:
MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013   Writer
There are always lots of secret reasons :D
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nope, you're right, that was a typo created typing this up from my notebook ;)
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:iconmagicaljoey:
MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013   Writer
Pffft, that's an excuse....tell us the super secret reason of awesomness ;P
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