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I'm building a canoe of bones,
it is mostly airtight with my dead bag skin
stretching paper thin about it.
I've found a way to proceed with
my split-blister oar arms, to push and pull me
like breath in the breeze;
battling the current is a simple losing thing.

I've wrapped nap sacks full of poetry, and
like a good railroad bum, Emily Bronte has taken herself along;
Heathcliff, don't miss me, Heathcliff,
I'm tucking my tongue in and it can't tell you
you're dead
you're dead
you're dead and I'm on the river again
feeding teeth to the fish.

There is a vagabond in my blood,
peddling my liver, the color of dried roses,
to the bottle on my ribcage bench.
Come and buy yourself a picture, come and see
a body built into something new, come
and see how hair floats like lilies.  A human boat
is a beautiful thing;

There's a peace to drift such
bathing in Ophelia's stream.
**EDIT** Accepted to Surreal Grotesque Issue #5
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The Written Revolution: I'm not sure about the ending. I don't normally end w/slant rhymes, etc, and I'm not sure if it's too cheesy...
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:iconmadameshadowenn:
madameshadowenn Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aloha! Just a little note to say I’ve used the title of this piece to help me create a title poem which you can read here: madameshadowenn.deviantart.com…
I’ve given you full credit in the comments section, but should you want me to remove your title, please do let me know!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013   General Artist
Fantastic poetry! Congratulations on the well-deserved DLD, lovely lady! :clap:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: TY
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013   General Artist
'smy pleasure, dolly. :tighthug:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013   General Artist
<3
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on the DLD! :clap:
I've read this a few times now and each time I like it more and more. Great imagery. :nod:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D TY!
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013   Writer
Congratulations on you DLD, dear! :clap:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you!
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013   Writer
You're so welcome. :) It was well deserved.
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So glad you got a DLD for this. There is some justice in the world!!!!! :love:
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vespera Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
awwwwwww :love: ty!
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Professional Writer
Congrats on the DLD, I'm glad it brought this to my attention!
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: thank you, Ron!
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013   Writer
Congrats on the DLD! :heart: A great take on Ophelia.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ty! isn't that funny that we were just talking about her?
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:iconbeeinthebottle:
beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013   Writer
That Ophelia really gets around.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
She is quite the hussy of a muse :D
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013   Writer
:D
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CactussKate Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your slant rhyme was sexy. ;D
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: why thank you!
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013   Writer
:+fav:
Congratulations on the DLD. Ophelia is a topic ripe with metaphor and rhyme, at least the way you wrote it. Thank you.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :D
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013   Writer
You're welcome.
Love your shoes, by the way. :D
Did you know Steve Martin wrote a book called [and wouldn't you know it, now I can't find it] something like Cruel Shoes?
A strange little book, as you might guess from the title. Anyway, yours look comfy...
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: these poor shoes have now died and my icon needs to be updated - but they were comfy while they lasted!
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013   Writer
oh lordy, don't change your username too. i'd never find you if you did!
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
LOL - I'd change them to a newer pair of shoes.
But my name? Never :dalove: it's been mine for too long to think about switching.
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013   Writer
^^; ... :love:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: [link]

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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vespera Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love slant rhymes, and they work here. :) Really great work!
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: why thank you!
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starshinexx Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're dead and I'm on the river again
feeding teeth to the fish. <3
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vespera Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Looks great (and reads great) in the publication. Wonderful poetry...
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Doesn't he do a fantastic job?
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:icontonepainter:
tonepainter Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah, he really does. I'm going to start reading it regularly now.
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Loan me your imagery, por favor. :D
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh sure, come here, I'll lend you some of my crazy ;)
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You come here.
Bring your goods to me, hehehe...

Really, aren't you supposed to head south for the winter?
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
LOL I live in Arizona. I AM south.
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's not the south, my dear.
Fiiiiine, though....just go wayyyyy over yonder.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
LOL. Next time I go to the south I have to meet Jenner's mama. I'm avoiding the south for now :D
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
LOL...is that in Florida?
I'm supposed to go to a wedding in Florida in December.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yea, Orlando area. Fake south.
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SurrealGrotesque77 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012  Student Artist
awesome, you should totally submit this. Your stuff reminds me of Sylvia Plath or Anne Sexton.
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vespera Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's really funny that you should say that since they're currently on my mind quite a bit (and this one was written so long ago). I do mean to submit this, I just want to do it properly and haven't had the time to submit anywhere the last several days. I will have this sent over to you this week :)
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011   Writer
you're rendition of "cheesy" "slant rhymes" works wonders. :heart:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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