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Not a dalliance-
Lissome scintillas blossom,
Become forest fires
This was written for :iconfuzzyhoser:'s contest a while back. Not long before the fire that took out all our firefighters in Northern Arizona, so looking at it now, it has a different context for me. A little sadder.

Fuzzy didn't love me enough to even consider it in the finals *sniffles* even though I sent it via mail. Like a baller.
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The use of less yet more creative words makes this unique, instead of using simple words or phrases time was taken to find essentially a base words to convey the meaning of this poem.

Yet while good and thought out length is something to desire.

Also using it like a memorial for the fire fighter lost in Northern Arizona is a kind gesture to the families or those that knew them, though I think that you should find a credible website with the name of those lost not in just that fire but of all that year if possible and link it in this post.
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You use many unique words that no one commonly uses which is giving you and advantage of originality and some technique (sadly technique is not well apllied here). Your vision seems broad to me, you have shown me the things that other can't see. The thing you are indicating is so simple in the shadow of uncommon words which only dictionary can solve. I think you are trying to describe a cluster of flowers which a graceful minute of happiness then fading away, also mentioning not wasting time (Am i right?). You have strong impact of wordplay on the observers, you are trying to teach us that a moment of something which can be easily fading away and that moment of something is not a waste of time.
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synconi Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013   Artisan Crafter
Liking the elemental themes, with earth linked to fire...this poem sounds wonderful, all those liquid "l"s that roll of your tongue coupled with the whispery "s" sounds. Makes me want to read it all slow and melancholic :heart:
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vespera Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: thank you!
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synconi Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013   Artisan Crafter
You're welcome :)
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013
This made me happy. :XD:
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vespera Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Tuishimi Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013
Very pretty wording.  I had to look up Lissome ... alternate form of lithesome...  :)
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vespera Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(I had to look it up when she gave us the words, too, and went with the spelling she'd given us... ;))
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"Like a baller," indeed. :lmao: This is absolutely fantastic. :clap:
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vespera Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: That's how we do! (and other comments that make me glow more in the dark with my whiteness HA HA)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: YEAH! :dummy: (Oh my gosh. :rofl:)
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