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(Contains: sexual themes)
Why has a man never told me I have a neck
like a crane? I have spider appendages, Daddy Long Legs,
am an Amazon in the right skirt, sure-

They've mentioned heart lips and the round
of my hind. Rename me like a perfume,
like sex on two feet,
like walking meat.

No one says: you move
like a breeze. No one says:
your eyes are a swimming peace. Instead,

I am nice ass. I am sufficient tits. I am constructed
into some poster wish, and oh yes, Baby, won't you wear
those higher heels? That shorter dress?
Bend over, sweetie, like a supple tree,
reach right over.
Just like that, Ma.
       Just.
       Like.
       That.

A man's never told me: I love your lips
for the words they spill, for the nouns
they round, for how they puff air out pressed
like little irons.

Nor have I heard a word about my ears,
how well they listen to this body-slander,
how they gape themselves like sick synonyms
under-ripe
with sex appeal.

Please tell me, there's more than smooth skin,
more than a useful tongue and teeth, more than
open legs like open caskets.
Tell me: your collar bone looks like an ark, your hands
like a safe keeping, your hair smells like home
and safe spring passing.

Tell me: your fingers
are for more than pianos
or my penis.
Older poem (circa 2007, maybe?) reworked in 2013.

Published in The Rampallian Spring 2013 issue: www.magcloud.com/browse/issue/…
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is really beautiful, really perfect. :heart:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Student Writer
Wow.... this is spectacular. I love this concept, and I think many, many women can relate to it's message. Well done, and thank you for sharing!
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: thank you!
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:iconmistressofquills:
MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome:aww:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014   General Artist
just makes me deeply sigh :heart:
congratulations both on getting published and the dd, dear lady. :tighthug:
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vespera Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
YOU :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2014   General Artist
:iconnouplz: :iconbeautifulheartplz:
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Student Writer
Congratulations. This is really a wonderful poem.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thanks!
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BlueSoulGreenMind Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014
There is a need for substance in desire.
That theme is consistent throughout the poem and the thought flows.
I love the negative connotation you gave to being lusted over with this verse:
"Please tell me, there's more than smooth skin,
more than a useful tongue and teeth, more than
open legs like open caskets."
That comparison with death and sex was beautiful. 
I mean when you are looked at as an object you aren't looked at as living or as another person.
it really drove your message home:

Desire me like you want ME, ALL of me, so I know what you are seeing is ME and not my "Attributes"  
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vespera Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: thank you so much for the in-depth reading feedback. I really appreciate it!
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BlueSoulGreenMind Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014
You are most welcome. :)
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014   Writer
How did I miss this?! Congrats on the DD and the publication!
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
LOL, I miss DD's all the time. Been gone like a month now and am wondering what I've missed :/

Of course, I don't have time to look, but I can't handle my comments sitting here this long. LOL
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scatteredwords Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Look at you and your DDs!
...realizes how inappropriate that comment is for this poem. :doh:
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vespera Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH HAHAHAHAHA

D is for Determination D is for Determination 
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is really wonderful. I love the language and imagery and the way your thoughts spill and cascade down each line. It's perfect.

Congrats on the DD. Very well deserved. :)
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vespera Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thanks Jen!
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure. :)
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
wheeeee !!! :squee: congrats ! and very well deserved
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vespera Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer

:glomp:



(it's the secret Oprah success pyramid working it's magic.)

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Wordeea Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
(heheh)
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ghost-of-a-gone-bird Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014
A man's never told me: I love your lips
for the words they spill, for the nouns
they round, for how they puff air out pressed
like little irons.


stunning poetry.Heart 
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vespera Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: thank you!
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
A most richly deserved DD. Congratulations, dear. :heart:
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vespera Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:love: you're always so sweet
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Itsukiart Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Im so anti feminist that I don't know should I be provoked from this, or just say that I don't give a flying fuck.
at the moment Im bored and I don't get enough out from this. so Im just going to say that I don't give a fuck.
tho Im probably go and get provoked from something else and come back to yell at you about not appreciating what you have. 
and if this doesn't get feminazi idiots angry enough, Im going to call them useless cunts.
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014   Writer
Say what? :lol:  I suggest you take your nearly incoherent opinions to the complaints forum, where I'm sure they will be well received.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle:
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014   Writer
:D
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Itsukiart Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
haven't been before.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:cheers:  to the hope that you will never procreate, sir.
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Itsukiart Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
u don't have to worry about that.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer

trust me, with an attitude like that, I wasn't terribly worried


do you know what feminism is?

cause it's not this poem

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Itsukiart Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I know what feminism is. we have give women all freedoms and they are at same level as men. but they want even more, they go yelling that men are some kind of mutation that should not even exist and how women are so superior side of men.
I don't really accept violence towards anyone, but I really want to hit these peoples. they make me angry at so many different levels that I would beat their heads to shit like bruce willis did back in Sin City.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
If you don't give a fuck, then why are you wasting your time commenting (and with horrid grammar, by the way) on a piece that doesn't concern you? She made no feminist claims; this is a poem about appreciation. Also, you do not know what she has. To be so presumptuous is not only ignorant on your end but it's a complete waste of energy. You can go back to your pornographic cartoons now if you like.
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Itsukiart Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
feminazi
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:roll:
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Itsukiart Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
so you don't deny, damn I hope someone rapes and murders you.
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Professional Writer
You are a goddess on the breeze & the most beautiful thing I've ever seen & your words make me ache & shimmer & want to show you what I see. I really really do love you. :heart:
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vespera Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Howl Emote? 
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lomatic Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
amazing and very moving
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:rose: thank you for the feedback :)
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lomatic Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
..my pleasure.
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hudgens77 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist
So lovely! I want a man like that too, haha :):heart:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: thank you!
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hudgens77 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist
you're welcome!:)
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Eeeeyyy, congratulations on your DD! I knew you would get one on this piece!
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