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Won't you leave me?  I will love you
more than if you stay, transfixed

to the point of reference, our bodies
melding a sad, soft sublime, the back

spine of a little universe blown out
like a crafter's hot glass, the growing

moment, the wonder, the expansion
before a chill.  
Published at The Neglected Ratio 1/23/13


:iconfuzzyhoser: sent me the perfect title for this. :heart:

And so it is
Just like you said it should be
We'll both forget the breeze
Most of the time
And so it is
The colder water
The blower's daughter
The pupil in denial

I can't take my eyes off of you
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes off of you
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes...

Did I say that I loathe you?
Did I say that I want to
Leave it all behind?

I can't take my mind off of you
I can't take my mind off you
I can't take my mind off of you
I can't take my mind off you
I can't take my mind off you
I can't take my mind...
My mind...my mind...
'Til I find somebody new


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:iconflummo:
flummo Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Student Writer
"the back
spine of a little universe blown out
like a crafter's hot glass, the growing
moment, the wonder, the expansion
before a chill."
... :heart:

And I love Damien Rice.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Such a great song.
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
"I will love you more than if you stay..."
one of those lines that fits perfect the first
time you try it on.
Love the whole thing. The close is lucious.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:


(I almost didn't put this up on dA or out for publication as I thought it was too plain. :iconfuzzyhoser: saves the day, again.)
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
She did the right thing, again. As usual.
:)
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know if I'd say USUAL with Rachel in the same sentence.
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
Point taken. :nod:
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:iconwordeea:
wordeea Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
daw. the blower's daughter :heart: perfect for your words ...
(pupil-in-denial used to be my dA name :D )
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(why the change?)
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:iconwordeea:
wordeea Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i outgrew it. i was no longer in denial ;)
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ha ha ha! cute!

I've been branded too long on dA to ever change mine, I think, although I'm toying with the idea of updating my icon (I've only ever had one other one!)
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
You can't change. :O
Everyone calls you the girl with the shoes.
or even just The Shoes.
Ack.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I was thinking of new shoes ;)
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Oh.
That's a thought.
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:iconwordeea:
wordeea Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yeah, i am sticking with thus one now - it's the one u use everywhere anyway
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travelgirlxx Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Gorgeous. Absolutely efffffing gorgeous. And Damien? Perfect.
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:iconsherbetblooms:
sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Stunning :heart: blown out like hot glass - so rich and lush.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:iconiampoetry:
iamPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations!
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
TY!!!
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emilygolightly Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Student Writer
mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

my favourite thing of yours in ages
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Student Writer
this is wonderful.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: TY
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
"the back

spine of a little universe blown out
like a crafter's hot glass"
Ah, yes. :coffeecup:
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: that was my favourite part, too.
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:icontonepainter:
tonepainter Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like the glass blowing analogy...
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:icondelicatesilver:
Delicatesilver Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
If you're not published already, go out there and get published then send me a signed copy :)
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm published at small places online, but nothing in print (yet) :D
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:icondelicatesilver:
Delicatesilver Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, as soon as you are in print, you can count on my sale! I just love your work!
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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:iconthis-epiphany:
this-epiphany Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012   Writer
this is absolutely lovely and also I understand completely.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012   Writer
:heart::heart:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:blush:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012
beautiful :heart:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: thank you
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm happy you're so easy to convince. ;)
Again...lovely, lovely, lovely.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you're good at titles :D
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I just like naming things. What was it I was gonna start calling you again? Shoot. It escapes me. :confused:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Cupcake?
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I think it was Einstein... But Cupcake won. Cupcakes taste better, too.
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
OH IT WAS EINSTEIN
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