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Won't you leave me?  I will love you
more than if you stay, transfixed

to the point of reference, our bodies
melding a sad, soft sublime, the back

spine of a little universe blown out
like a crafter's hot glass, the growing

moment, the wonder, the expansion
before a chill.  
Published at The Neglected Ratio 1/23/13


:iconfuzzyhoser: sent me the perfect title for this. :heart:

And so it is
Just like you said it should be
We'll both forget the breeze
Most of the time
And so it is
The colder water
The blower's daughter
The pupil in denial

I can't take my eyes off of you
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes off of you
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes...

Did I say that I loathe you?
Did I say that I want to
Leave it all behind?

I can't take my mind off of you
I can't take my mind off you
I can't take my mind off of you
I can't take my mind off you
I can't take my mind off you
I can't take my mind...
My mind...my mind...
'Til I find somebody new


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flummo Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"the back
spine of a little universe blown out
like a crafter's hot glass, the growing
moment, the wonder, the expansion
before a chill."
... :heart:

And I love Damien Rice.
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vespera Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Such a great song.
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:iconriparii:
"I will love you more than if you stay..."
one of those lines that fits perfect the first
time you try it on.
Love the whole thing. The close is lucious.
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vespera Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:


(I almost didn't put this up on dA or out for publication as I thought it was too plain. :iconfuzzyhoser: saves the day, again.)
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:iconriparii:
She did the right thing, again. As usual.
:)
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:iconvespera:
vespera Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know if I'd say USUAL with Rachel in the same sentence.
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:iconriparii:
Point taken. :nod:
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Wordeea Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
daw. the blower's daughter :heart: perfect for your words ...
(pupil-in-denial used to be my dA name :D )
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vespera Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(why the change?)
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:iconwordeea:
Wordeea Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i outgrew it. i was no longer in denial ;)
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